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Stories that left you disappointed for a reason
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It’s only hilarious to me because this was all within like a month or two. “I wouldn’t like twilight in real life” yeah obviously there’s lots of characters I like that I would hate irl???. Funny because he used to brag about how much he loved and his plans for MC all changed after one conversation with her. I understand though, love makes you do insane things can’t fault him.
Its fiction at the end of the day. Ofc there's some limits, but to 180 your morally grey story loved by many just cuz a girl you really like might disapprove of it if she finds out? He can show he doesnt condone the actions of the MC by writing consequences for them, but instead he decided to rewrite the story making the MC a goody two shoes? to be frank, its kinda insulting to authors who manage to force themself to write such topics. Im not gonna pretend i enjoy cheating elements and a few more such topics in stories, but i do respect authors who find it in them to write it anyway.
He just didn't have the cajones to be an independent author. The independent author is in control of his/her money, thus his/her relationships.
And like I say, you can't pretend to be Edward Cullen without living by his principles. Meaning, Bella could never force him to change his character
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Quote "lying, deceptive bastard."
Here to make a small rant on possibly my smallest pet peeve with authors and something that is kind of a non-issue because it doesnt even happen that often, but i hate it when authors use big words all the time. Especially in medieval times until the 1800's. Maybe by big words, i just mean historical words or arhaic words or whatever they're called.
I see stories like jolly good and pon para being praised, but whever i start reading them i have to stop because my head starts hurting just from trying to understand what's being said. I do like learning a few words and metaphors from the stories I read, because it helps with my english (not my first language), but goddamn these types of stories got me googling whole sentences lmao. And it just makes me dissapointed, because i enjoy reading about these time periods the most but i cant even understand anything. And I'm not sure how i can even learn those words or phrases because I don't see them being used anywhere else.
Despite my criticism of the relics series and golden rose, I actually understood what's being said most of the time and learned new stuff! But with the games above, I just look at the page blankly, thinking "I have never seen these letters in that order before" lol
I obviously don't blame the authors for it, and again, this isnt even a real issue. they're using those words correctly and it makes sense for the story (most likely).
i'm sure native speakers understand and enjoy the stories, but it makes me frustrated in myself more than anything. any non eglish speaker feeling the same?
I see stories like jolly good and pon para being praised, but whever i start reading them i have to stop because my head starts hurting just from trying to understand what's being said. I do like learning a few words and metaphors from the stories I read, because it helps with my english (not my first language), but goddamn these types of stories got me googling whole sentences lmao. And it just makes me dissapointed, because i enjoy reading about these time periods the most but i cant even understand anything. And I'm not sure how i can even learn those words or phrases because I don't see them being used anywhere else.
Despite my criticism of the relics series and golden rose, I actually understood what's being said most of the time and learned new stuff! But with the games above, I just look at the page blankly, thinking "I have never seen these letters in that order before" lol
I obviously don't blame the authors for it, and again, this isnt even a real issue. they're using those words correctly and it makes sense for the story (most likely).
i'm sure native speakers understand and enjoy the stories, but it makes me frustrated in myself more than anything. any non eglish speaker feeling the same?
Counterpoint: nothing breaks immersion faster than a medieval peasant discussing how to treat panic attacks and improve mental health like they're a bored hipster barista in a 5th generation coffee shop.
Signed, a fellow non-english speaker.
That's a criticism that applies to Weeping Gods it seems that no matter how old I am or my status I talk like a pubescent teenager trying to be hip.
That, and anglophone dialectism that are not only anachronistic, but out of place as well.
Darling, why does your Egyptian servant speak like a Scottish highland bruv?
The author clearly made effort with writing distinct character intros, but boy is it an uneven mess down the line. Especially the pharaoh.
Ancient Egypt used to be my passion. I once started to write a story in an AE-inspired setting, and I actually studied a bit of Egyptian so that I could understand how words were formed and reflect it through speech patterns.
...of course, even if I were to go back to this idea sometime, 99% of readers wouldn't have cared lol
The color of an RO's underpants is apparently a much more interesting topic.
...of course, even if I were to go back to this idea sometime, 99% of readers wouldn't have cared lol
The color of an RO's underpants is apparently a much more interesting topic.
Spartacus tv show did it too and it was great. Well paced sprinkles of latin and a 'share a meal with me' instead of "bro let's grab a lunch".
It felt coherent and easy to perceive.
I'm sure many readers notice. So will there be a chance for you to finish the story?
By "once" I mean like... idk, ten years ago? It was written out pen-on-paper, in a notebook (yes, I'm that old(-fashioned). I've never re-typed it in a digital form, and I've since lost all the notes. Maybe one day I could start anew, idk.
In any case, I'm already writing a story, and I'd rather not work on several things at once. It's a slow going as-is for me. I'm just complaining because it feels like what I'm interested in writing and what the audiences are interested in discussing are two very different things, lol. But it's not the end of the world.
I do love sesquipedalian writings.
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Which game has a medieval peasant discussing mental health??
In Blood Legacies before it was rewritten, there was a scene, where character clearly calls a health event a 'panic attack' and talks through how to breathe to resolve it.
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"Ya know, Larry," Harold said, wiping the sweat off his forehead with the sleeve of his tunic, "methinks the nobles in that damn fancy castle over there could pay a bit more attention to our mental health."
Larry grunted non-commitally, his attention taken up by a particularly large weed. He was trying to pull it free for quite a few moments by then, but that dumb thing just wasn't going to let go!
"I mean, don't you see?" He swept his hand, gesturing at the wide, wide field they were supposed to clean of weeds. That's what Larry was seeing; weeds, and in the future, he was foreseeing the wrath of Lord Rostbrock when he came down from the castle to inspect the work done. Or not done, as it may have been. "We do all this work for him, and all he ever calls us is "dirty peasants"! Ain't that horrible for your morale, sense of self-worth, self-esteem? Don't you think your feelings deserve validation, your efforts, recognition? Don't you--"
*snap!*
Larry must've pulled the weed too hard, for it had snapped, and he found himself falling backwards until his behind met the dry, hard earth. One half of the plant hung uselessly in his hand, while the other was still sticking out of the soil, mocking him with just its mere presence.
Cursing, he got up to his feet.
"God's sake, Harold!" He threw his half of the weed away before turning to glare at his companion. "Ain't no love for the good lord in me, but he's right to call you idiot, he is! Now stop spewing s h i t and help me with the f u c k i n g weeds, or God so help me I'll tell Matilda you got drunk again!"
With a heavy sigh, Harold bent down in the grass. They just didn't understand him, no one did. They were all busy with small petty things like crops and game and wood, while he was the only one who could dream big, see the bigger picture.
And yet, as he went home in the evening and was greeted with the smell of a freshly-made stew, a treacherous thought entered his mind - that perhaps the game and crops and weeds, too, were significant in a way.
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I agree. The author said that she didn't want a “boring” MC but so far this MC is pretty boring to me, didn't even finish the demo
. Its their story, but I prefer nuance and variation and that character comes off as one note to me.Could be worse, he could have called someone "guv'nor"
