Stories that left you disappointed for a reason

[realman]

Here to make a small rant on possibly my smallest pet peeve with authors and something that is kind of a non-issue because it doesnt even happen that often, but i hate it when authors use big words all the time. Especially in medieval times until the 1800's. Maybe by big words, i just mean historical words or arhaic words or whatever they're called.

I see stories like jolly good and pon para being praised, but whever i start reading them i have to stop because my head starts hurting just from trying to understand what's being said. I do like learning a few words and metaphors from the stories I read, because it helps with my english (not my first language), but goddamn these types of stories got me googling whole sentences lmao. And it just makes me dissapointed, because i enjoy reading about these time periods the most but i cant even understand anything. And I'm not sure how i can even learn those words or phrases because I don't see them being used anywhere else.

Despite my criticism of the relics series and golden rose, I actually understood what's being said most of the time and learned new stuff! But with the games above, I just look at the page blankly, thinking "I have never seen these letters in that order before" lol
I obviously don't blame the authors for it, and again, this isnt even a real issue. they're using those words correctly and it makes sense for the story (most likely).
i'm sure native speakers understand and enjoy the stories, but it makes me frustrated in myself more than anything. any non eglish speaker feeling the same?

 

[sylwyn]

but i hate it when authors use big words all the time. Especially in medieval times until the 1800's. Maybe by big words, i just mean historical words or arhaic words or whatever they're called.

Counterpoint: nothing breaks immersion faster than a medieval peasant discussing how to treat panic attacks and improve mental health like they're a bored hipster barista in a 5th generation coffee shop.

Signed, a fellow non-english speaker.

 

[Lovecraft]

Counterpoint: nothing breaks immersion faster than a medieval peasant discussing how to treat panic attacks and improve mental health like they're a bored hipster barista in a 5th generation coffee shop.

Signed, a fellow non-english speaker.

That's a criticism that applies to Weeping Gods it seems that no matter how old I am or my status I talk like a pubescent teenager trying to be hip.

 

[sylwyn]

That's a criticism that applies to Weeping Gods it seems that no matter how old I am or my status I talk like a pubescent teenager trying to be hip.

That, and anglophone dialectism that are not only anachronistic, but out of place as well.

Darling, why does your Egyptian servant speak like a Scottish highland bruv?

The author clearly made effort with writing distinct character intros, but boy is it an uneven mess down the line. Especially the pharaoh.

 

[seneya]

Ancient Egypt used to be my passion. I once started to write a story in an AE-inspired setting, and I actually studied a bit of Egyptian so that I could understand how words were formed and reflect it through speech patterns.
...of course, even if I were to go back to this idea sometime, 99% of readers wouldn't have cared lol
The color of an RO's underpants is apparently a much more interesting topic.

 

[sylwyn]

Ancient Egypt used to be my passion. I once started to write a story in an AE-inspired setting, and I actually studied a bit of Egyptian so that I could understand how words were formed and reflect it through speech patterns.

Spartacus tv show did it too and it was great. Well paced sprinkles of latin and a 'share a meal with me' instead of "bro let's grab a lunch".

It felt coherent and easy to perceive.

I'm sure many readers notice. So will there be a chance for you to finish the story?

 

[seneya]

I'm sure many readers notice. So will there be a chance for you to finish the story?

By "once" I mean like... idk, ten years ago? It was written out pen-on-paper, in a notebook (yes, I'm that old(-fashioned). I've never re-typed it in a digital form, and I've since lost all the notes. Maybe one day I could start anew, idk.
In any case, I'm already writing a story, and I'd rather not work on several things at once. It's a slow going as-is for me. I'm just complaining because it feels like what I'm interested in writing and what the audiences are interested in discussing are two very different things, lol. But it's not the end of the world.

 

[Hitoshura_tdn]

Here to make a small rant on possibly my smallest pet peeve with authors and something that is kind of a non-issue because it doesnt even happen that often, but i hate it when authors use big words all the time. Especially in medieval times until the 1800's. Maybe by big words, i just mean historical words or arhaic words or whatever they're called.

I see stories like jolly good and pon para being praised, but whever i start reading them i have to stop because my head starts hurting just from trying to understand what's being said. I do like learning a few words and metaphors from the stories I read, because it helps with my english (not my first language), but goddamn these types of stories got me googling whole sentences lmao. And it just makes me dissapointed, because i enjoy reading about these time periods the most but i cant even understand anything. And I'm not sure how i can even learn those words or phrases because I don't see them being used anywhere else.

Despite my criticism of the relics series and golden rose, I actually understood what's being said most of the time and learned new stuff! But with the games above, I just look at the page blankly, thinking "I have never seen these letters in that order before" lol
I obviously don't blame the authors for it, and again, this isnt even a real issue. they're using those words correctly and it makes sense for the story (most likely).
i'm sure native speakers understand and enjoy the stories, but it makes me frustrated in myself more than anything. any non eglish speaker feeling the same?

I do love sesquipedalian writings.

 

[Vamp-kun]

Here to make a small rant on possibly my smallest pet peeve with authors and something that is kind of a non-issue because it doesnt even happen that often, but i hate it when authors use big words all the time. Especially in medieval times until the 1800's. Maybe by big words, i just mean historical words or arhaic words or whatever they're called.

I see stories like jolly good and pon para being praised, but whever i start reading them i have to stop because my head starts hurting just from trying to understand what's being said. I do like learning a few words and metaphors from the stories I read, because it helps with my english (not my first language), but goddamn these types of stories got me googling whole sentences lmao. And it just makes me dissapointed, because i enjoy reading about these time periods the most but i cant even understand anything. And I'm not sure how i can even learn those words or phrases because I don't see them being used anywhere else.

Despite my criticism of the relics series and golden rose, I actually understood what's being said most of the time and learned new stuff! But with the games above, I just look at the page blankly, thinking "I have never seen these letters in that order before" lol
I obviously don't blame the authors for it, and again, this isnt even a real issue. they're using those words correctly and it makes sense for the story (most likely).
i'm sure native speakers understand and enjoy the stories, but it makes me frustrated in myself more than anything. any non eglish speaker feeling the same?

As a third language English user, I unequivocally affirm that this is an often seen pattern. Never ephemerally

 

[Parallax]

Counterpoint: nothing breaks immersion faster than a medieval peasant discussing how to treat panic attacks and improve mental health like they're a bored hipster barista in a 5th generation coffee shop.

Signed, a fellow non-english speaker.

Which game has a medieval peasant discussing mental health??

 

[sylwyn]

Which game has a medieval peasant discussing mental health??

In Blood Legacies before it was rewritten, there was a scene, where character clearly calls a health event a 'panic attack' and talks through how to breathe to resolve it.

 

[seneya]

Which game has a medieval peasant discussing mental health??

Challenge Accepted? (

"Ya know, Larry," Harold said, wiping the sweat off his forehead with the sleeve of his tunic, "methinks the nobles in that damn fancy castle over there could pay a bit more attention to our mental health."

Larry grunted non-commitally, his attention taken up by a particularly large weed. He was trying to pull it free for quite a few moments by then, but that dumb thing just wasn't going to let go!

"I mean, don't you see?" He swept his hand, gesturing at the wide, wide field they were supposed to clean of weeds. That's what Larry was seeing; weeds, and in the future, he was foreseeing the wrath of Lord Rostbrock when he came down from the castle to inspect the work done. Or not done, as it may have been. "We do all this work for him, and all he ever calls us is "dirty peasants"! Ain't that horrible for your morale, sense of self-worth, self-esteem? Don't you think your feelings deserve validation, your efforts, recognition? Don't you--"

*snap!*

Larry must've pulled the weed too hard, for it had snapped, and he found himself falling backwards until his behind met the dry, hard earth. One half of the plant hung uselessly in his hand, while the other was still sticking out of the soil, mocking him with just its mere presence.

Cursing, he got up to his feet.

"God's sake, Harold!" He threw his half of the weed away before turning to glare at his companion. "Ain't no love for the good lord in me, but he's right to call you idiot, he is! Now stop spewing s h i t and help me with the f u c k i n g weeds, or God so help me I'll tell Matilda you got drunk again!"

With a heavy sigh, Harold bent down in the grass. They just didn't understand him, no one did. They were all busy with small petty things like crops and game and wood, while he was the only one who could dream big, see the bigger picture.

And yet, as he went home in the evening and was greeted with the smell of a freshly-made stew, a treacherous thought entered his mind - that perhaps the game and crops and weeds, too, were significant in a way.

 

[ADB446]

I was wondering about the discussion of cant save your love from dying, so I decided to check it out and yeah yikes.

Bad enough that there isn't much player agency but the story and characters themselves are par for the course.

Also the MC seems like a dick, like in one option you can be snide to a certain character and in that scene the MC tosses a shot glasses into a crowd, like the ****?

The only reason I see why people like it is because of the drama and SECKS

I agree. The author said that she didn't want a “boring” MC but so far this MC is pretty boring to me, didn't even finish the demo . Its their story, but I prefer nuance and variation and that character comes off as one note to me.

 

[Hitoshura_tdn]

Challenge Accepted? (

"Ya know, Larry," Harold said, wiping the sweat off his forehead with the sleeve of his tunic, "methinks the nobles in that damn fancy castle over there could pay a bit more attention to our mental health."

Larry grunted non-commitally, his attention taken up by a particularly large weed. He was trying to pull it free for quite a few moments by then, but that dumb thing just wasn't going to let go!

"I mean, don't you see?" He swept his hand, gesturing at the wide, wide field they were supposed to clean of weeds. That's what Larry was seeing; weeds, and in the future, he was foreseeing the wrath of Lord Rostbrock when he came down from the castle to inspect the work done. Or not done, as it may have been. "We do all this work for him, and all he ever calls us is "dirty peasants"! Ain't that horrible for your morale, sense of self-worth, self-esteem? Don't you think your feelings deserve validation, your efforts, recognition? Don't you--"

*snap!*

Larry must've pulled the weed too hard, for it had snapped, and he found himself falling backwards until his behind met the dry, hard earth. One half of the plant hung uselessly in his hand, while the other was still sticking out of the soil, mocking him with just its mere presence.

Cursing, he got up to his feet.

"God's sake, Harold!" He threw his half of the weed away before turning to glare at his companion. "Ain't no love for the good lord in me, but he's right to call you idiot, he is! Now stop spewing s h i t and help me with the f u c k i n g weeds, or God so help me I'll tell Matilda you got drunk again!"

With a heavy sigh, Harold bent down in the grass. They just didn't understand him, no one did. They were all busy with small petty things like crops and game and wood, while he was the only one who could dream big, see the bigger picture.

And yet, as he went home in the evening and was greeted with the smell of a freshly-made stew, a treacherous thought entered his mind - that perhaps the crops and weeds, too, were significant in a way.

Could be worse, he could have called someone "guv'nor"

 

[Zeus]

I agree. The author said that she didn't want a “boring” MC but so far this MC is pretty boring to me, didn't even finish the demo . Its their story, but I prefer nuance and variation and that character comes off as one note to me.

Yep the mc is boring and R is very childish, I'm wondering how the stupid mc thought it was a good idea to run off and be completely dependent on fcking R was a good idea or would end well for them and the author talks about the music business like she got insider information

 

[Lovecraft]

A personal pet peeve that I have is when a if I'm playing is obviously catered to specific gender or personality otherwise its extremely jarring. For examples games like tainted souls or love and leases are made for Fem Mc and if you play through the game with any other gender it just feels bizzare. Another example would be Pre Rewrite Sword of Rhivenia in which unless you're a tyrant who lops of orphans hands for stealing food with out hearing them out and being a brutal warmonger with no empathy your citizen's hate you. Rewrites awesome though props for the author for improving its vastly better then pre rewrite

 

[Zeus]

I don't like games with simple mystery plots you can figure out in like 5 minutes and I don't mean as the reader, like any random person in the mc's place would figure it out and that "mystery" gets dragged until the end of the game

 

[yourstalkeroutside]

A personal pet peeve that I have is when a if I'm playing is obviously catered to specific gender or personality otherwise its extremely jarring. For examples games like tainted souls or love and leases are made for Fem Mc and if you play through the game with any other gender it just feels bizzare. Another example would be Pre Rewrite Sword of Rhivenia in which unless you're a tyrant who lops of orphans for stealing food with out hearing them out and being a brutal warmonger with no empathy you citizen's hate. Rewrites awesome though props for the author for improving its vastly better then pre rewrite

As much as I enjoy POMA, this is my biggest issue with Nicky's writing. Both POMA and Jinlai are super tailored towards a male MC with a specific type of personality to the point I couldn't even get into the latter. Sad, because a lot of content is locked behind playing in that one specific way.

 

[Glitch]

This. I don't know why he bothers writing a genderselectable MC, when it's clear he already has a set MC in mind, targeted towards a certain audience, which you can guess by the comment on his threads and which ones he choses to answer.

 

[seneya]

Could be worse, he could have called someone "guv'nor"

Uh, just in case, it's not from any game lol. It's something I wrote in like 5 min as a prompt/parody of sorts

This. I don't know why he bothers writing a genderselectable MC

Personally, I'm glad I get the choice, even if it's not perfect in terms of content distribution.