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Sokrates

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chooseyourstory.com gives me ptsd. Back 6 years or so ago it was filled with uber edgey 30 years that used the site as a platform to D-wave. Seeing the conversations that went on their had me drowning in the ick. I stopped enjoying a lot of the works there just because i couldn't separate the works from the author when every story had a thread under it with the author acting like a high class billionaire trying to explain physics to a 6 year old because they criticized the way something was worded or the pacing of a story. Being in those threads felt like being in a human centipede. At the end of my time there, Someone disagreed with an author, Who was also a mod (That already felt like a conflict of interest) Said mod basically told everyone on the site they were not allowed to post anything for an amount of time (Wow who knew making an author a moderator on a public site in which his or her works are posted was a bad idea) At that point i was done with the site as a whole so i had a bit of fun and took the ban. Never looked back. Until now apparently.
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Well no idea on what the hell happens in the forums themselves, since I couldn't care less about interacting with them. I'm there for the storygames, not for the community. I play, rate and write reviews (thoughts) on my gameplay experience and that's it.

Honestly, I wish there was a feature like that (commenting) on wips and demos without having to be extra careful on "author's feelings" who can't handle even polite criticism on their writing. That's why I'm glad we got this thread.
 
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Sokrates said:
Well no idea on what the hell happens in the forums themselves, since I couldn't care less about interacting with them. I'm there for the storygames, not for the community. I play, rate and write reviews (thoughts) on my gameplay experience and that's it.

Honestly, I wish there was a feature like that (commenting) on wips and demos without having to be extra careful on "author's feelings" who can't handle even polite criticism on their writing. That's why I'm glad we got this thread.
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Of course. Port de Pais is where us, pirates, can settle down for a bit!
 
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Making My first post just to complain about On the Run: Rogue Heroes. If I couldve told you what the plot was about.

Falling it rushed would be nice.

Royal Affairs was a close second.

I loved Creme de la Creme. This one was boring to me. Trevelyan's romance was done dirty. Had potential but wasted every inch of it.
 
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Shadow1904

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Crown of Conquest.
10 chatgpt out of 10.

Intricate tapestry weaving auras of stalwart idiocy. Repeated several times on the same page.
But "His presence radiated radiant smile" takes the grand prix.

Oh an the author replies to thread in the same manner. I'm half convinced he's an autonomous agent someone sicked on the forum to see if it can fool people into being a writer.
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The thread is gone and Google turns up nothing so I have no idea what you're referencing

I thought you meant crown of sorcery (whatever it's actually called, the elf queen one) at first
 
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Shadow1904

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sylwyn said:
Thread is still there.
You need to be logged in on that site and enter the "adult content" group before the topic becomes available to read.
Here's direct link to the demo https://dashingdon.com/play/prandyesh/the-golden-throne-/mygame/
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I read one paragraph and was already irritated

that's bloody impressive

Edit: Oh, I went into the thread and the author admits to using AI...right after a reply attacking someone (you?) pointing out that it feels like AI generated slop 😆. I do like that reply from the other person that also reads like an AI generated essay though.
 
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right after a reply attacking someone (you?) pointing out that it feels like AI generated slop
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Wasn't me, but likely someone sharing the sentiment.
Yet CoG forum is always full of groupies that grovel before authors for the sake of virtual internet points or something.

One more peculiar thing is the author's name is Pradnesh, which is the same name a Hindu god of knowledge has. Very tongue in cheek name for someone with little command over English, even more so if he indeed is an AI bot.
 
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kecap asin

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sylwyn said:
Thread is still there.
You need to be logged in on that site and enter the "adult content" group before the topic becomes available to read.
Here's direct link to the demo https://dashingdon.com/play/prandyesh/the-golden-throne-/mygame/
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Bro 💀
Somehow the people who dk riding the author is more embarrassing than the AI used itself.
There's even a person who defending the author by saying "It doesn’t matter if he is using AI or not, as long as the game is good and huge. I’m fine with that."
This person is given a literal sht, and he's grateful for it. Because its 'huge'.
 
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There are a few stories that left me feeling disappointed, often because of high expectations or a sudden narrative shift. For example:

  1. "Game of Thrones" (TV series) – The final season, especially the last few episodes, felt rushed. Many fans, including myself, expected deeper character arcs and more satisfying resolutions, given the intricate build-up throughout the series.
  2. "Lost" (TV series) – While the show was captivating for many seasons, its ending left numerous questions unanswered. The final explanation for the island's mysteries didn’t feel cohesive with earlier storylines.
  3. "The Hunger Games: Mockingjay" (Book/Film) – The conclusion, while grounded in the realities of trauma and war, felt bleak and unsatisfying. Katniss’s personal journey seemed to lose momentum in favor of a rushed political resolution.
  4. "Mass Effect 3" (Video game) – The ending received backlash for not providing sufficient closure to the complex choices players had made throughout the series, leaving many feeling like their decisions didn’t matter in the end.
In most cases, it’s not that the stories were bad, but that they didn't align with the expectations built over time. That contrast often leads to disappointment.
 
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tami123 said:
There are a few stories that left me feeling disappointed, often because of high expectations or a sudden narrative shift. For example:

  1. "Game of Thrones" (TV series) – The final season, especially the last few episodes, felt rushed. Many fans, including myself, expected deeper character arcs and more satisfying resolutions, given the intricate build-up throughout the series.
  2. "Lost" (TV series) – While the show was captivating for many seasons, its ending left numerous questions unanswered. The final explanation for the island's mysteries didn’t feel cohesive with earlier storylines.
  3. "The Hunger Games: Mockingjay" (Book/Film) – The conclusion, while grounded in the realities of trauma and war, felt bleak and unsatisfying. Katniss’s personal journey seemed to lose momentum in favor of a rushed political resolution.
  4. "Mass Effect 3" (Video game) – The ending received backlash for not providing sufficient closure to the complex choices players had made throughout the series, leaving many feeling like their decisions didn’t matter in the end.
In most cases, it’s not that the stories were bad, but that they didn't align with the expectations built over time. That contrast often leads to disappointment.
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This thread is for text-games in the style of choose your own adventure that disappointed us, but I'll chip in to your reply as well.

"Game of Thrones" (TV series)
Seriously, it's the fault of the directors for not sticking close to the books. They made Daenerys Targaryen look like a heroine, while in the books it's vaguely implied that she is the evil that Azor Ahai Reborn will defeat. Don't forget that the books begun as 1990s dark fantasy series with other mindset.

"The Hunger Games: Mockingjay" (Book/Film) In my worldview, it's an antiwar and antipolitics narrative, so of course Katniss will be tired from the struggle. Although, I remember that people say the author didn't have many ideas on what to do next after the first book, but the publishing house needed three books, so...

"Mass Effect 3" (Video game)
Mass Effect 3 was an even worse murder and actionification of the legendary first Mass Effect game, but, at least the combat mechanics were awesome.
 
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Vamp-kun said:
This thread is for text-games in the style of choose your own adventure that disappointed us, but I'll chip in to your reply as well.

"Game of Thrones" (TV series)
Seriously, it's the fault of the directors for not sticking close to the books. They made Daenerys Targaryen look like a heroine, while in the books it's vaguely implied that she is the evil that Azor Ahai Reborn will defeat. Don't forget that the books begun as 1990s dark fantasy series with other mindset.

"The Hunger Games: Mockingjay" (Book/Film) In my worldview, it's an antiwar and antipolitics narrative, so of course Katniss will be tired from the struggle. Although, I remember that people say the author didn't have many ideas on what to do next after the first book, but the publishing house needed three books, so...

"Mass Effect 3" (Video game)
Mass Effect 3 was an even worse murder and actionification of the legendary first Mass Effect game, but, at least the combat mechanics were awesome.
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Rings of Power: Need I say more? It is an insult to Tolkien
 
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Morgoth said:
Rings of Power: Need I say more? It is an insult to Tolkien
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Ugh. The story was supposed to be a long narrative in how the demon-like Sauron hid his form behind a veil of fake friendliness and supposed humanity by duping many kings into becoming his Wraiths. Sauron is nor human nor elf. He is of the Maiar (singular Maia). Primordial spirits created to help the Valar first shape the world.

Galadriel was supposed to understand that this mysterious "friendly" entity was about to trap nearly everybody into a dark web of lies and keep her distance, not really being able to influence anybody from the far lands that she was situated in.

Now the writers of TRoP want to create a forbidden romance story, or something like that. Seriously!
Just create a new tale from the hundreds of similar books that have been published but never seen any adaptation in eighty years!

Let the old ip's to die in peace.
 
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veil

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Love and leases.

It's fairly new. The demo just dropped recently. Check it out if you're interested. You have probably heard of it, if you're around tumblr a lot. You catch your fiancè and sister cheating on you on your anniversary. You lose your apartment and dog both because of them and are currently living with your best friend.

On to ranting.
The story was good. The premise is good. But some of the dialogues were so cringe worthy I had to close the tab and walk away from my laptop. Especially the bold flirting options. Why isn't there a single bold option that is not suggestive? I don't mind innuendo but in this IF it was straight up unbearable because of how poorly written it was. I am baffled to see that it's so popular but i suppose, to each his own. I came expecting something similar to apt-502 but man.... wth. Lol.
 
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Sant

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clover said:
Love and leases.

It's fairly new. The demo just dropped recently. Check it out if you're interested. You have probably heard of it, if you're around tumblr a lot. You catch your fiancè and sister cheating on you on your anniversary. You lose your apartment and dog both because of them and are currently living with your best friend.

On to ranting.
The story was good. The premise is good. But some of the dialogues were so cringe worthy I had to close the tab and walk away from my laptop. Especially the bold flirting options. Why isn't there a single bold option that is not suggestive? I don't mind innuendo but in this IF it was straight up unbearable because of how poorly written it was. I am baffled to see that it's so popular but i suppose, to each his own. I came expecting something similar to apt-502 but man.... wth. Lol.
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Tbh I dislike it because of the lack of choices, when it haves it's just some choices to define your flirting style
 
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clover said:
Love and leases.

It's fairly new. The demo just dropped recently. Check it out if you're interested. You have probably heard of it, if you're around tumblr a lot. You catch your fiancè and sister cheating on you on your anniversary. You lose your apartment and dog both because of them and are currently living with your best friend.

On to ranting.
The story was good. The premise is good. But some of the dialogues were so cringe worthy I had to close the tab and walk away from my laptop. Especially the bold flirting options. Why isn't there a single bold option that is not suggestive? I don't mind innuendo but in this IF it was straight up unbearable because of how poorly written it was. I am baffled to see that it's so popular but i suppose, to each his own. I came expecting something similar to apt-502 but man.... wth. Lol.
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Tbh, it seems like a story written for a female MC. The MC acts like a teenage girl, everyone treats MC like a girl especially Cam. As a straight guy, you can be sure that I will be creeped out by the way Cam acts. If I ever find out my best friend was lusting over me online I wont be able to see that guy the same way anymore (not in a good way). Now its an entirely different story when that person is someone you could potentially be interested in romantically and sexually. Therefore, it would have been better to make Cam gender selectable since that way the author could check off a common trope for all readers and that it wouldn't creep out a part of the readers and cater more interest to the game through the character (who is obviously very popular according to the author's tumblr).

I'm not a fan of the writing. As you said, the dialogues are nowhere good enough to express the mood some MC's might want to convey. I just cant find immersion anywhere in the demo. Tbh I read the demo completely and the only things that stayed with me are the negetives. That should say something. This is also the reason why I didnt send an ask for the Cam situation I mentioned. Since I cant find myself enjoying the story and there's the possiblity the author might not take well to my criticisms, I just decided not to care about it. Maybe I'll send an ask about this one of these days.
 
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As a straight guy, you can be sure that I will be creeped out by the way Cam acts. If I ever find out my best friend was lusting over me online I wont be able to see that guy the same way anymore (not in a good way). Now its an entirely different story when that person is someone you could potentially be interested in romantically and sexually. Therefore, it would have been better to make Cam gender selectable since that way the author could check off a common trope for all readers and that it wouldn't creep out a part of the readers and cater more interest to the game through the character (who is obviously very popular according to the author's tumblr).
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Ahhh I didn't get that far in the first place because I just couldn't tolerate it anymore lololol.

but maybe the author's reasoning behind not making Cam gender selectable was wanting to put the player in an awkward situation to add drama? You know, feelings are not something anyone can control so perhaps she wanted to add some realism. I see nothing wrong with it AS LONG AS she gives the player the choice to react negatively to cam's crush or set boundaries.
 
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clover said:
Ahhh I didn't get that far in the first place because I just couldn't tolerate it anymore lololol.

but maybe the author's reasoning behind not making Cam gender selectable was wanting to put the player in an awkward situation to add drama? You know, feelings are not something anyone can control so perhaps she wanted to add some realism. I see nothing wrong with it AS LONG AS she gives the player the choice to react negatively to cam's crush or set boundaries.
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No need for more drama in a story where you left your ex (selectable) for another ex and then that another ex cheated on you with your sister. I'm not a fan of stories forcing you into certain situations without giving you any agency. That's why I stopped reading 'Crown of Ashes and Flames'. Seemed like a story for masochists. There are these stories that railroads you into unpleasant environments and expects you to make friends and find love. I keep reading them expecting at some time it will pay off but no. Even 'The Exile' has moments like this but those moments are written well and is balanced well with the narrative.
 
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